There's something I very much like about that visual; the way I have it planned out is that he allows her (while she is still fully clothed) to undress him, allowing her in many ways to see the person he truly is. And very tentatively, she reaches to his scar, running her fingers over it. Later on, after they reunite, Aviva is wounded in a way that leaves a similar scar in an identical place on her left side, which Manfried mends himself. "Now we match," she tells him, attempting a bit of humor as he breaks down.
Yes! Everything you said makes perfect sense, and it's exactly what I intend to do with Rain Dogs.
Aw, goodness, I hope box.net works for you! If not, I'm willing to upload it to another site for you.
Excellent! One thing I've learned is to go with my creative instinct and with what feels right, and dark hair is Aviva.
Thank you! I was worried about writing effective dialogue, but as with the rest of the screenplay, I found that it all flowed naturally once I just learned to relax and go with it. There's quite a bit of double-meaning in the things they say to one another, which worked so perfectly without my having to overtly elaborate. For example, when they reunite and Aviva is showing him the papers she forged for his Belgian identity, he takes out a pair of eyeglasses from his shirt pocket so he can read them. In his time away, he got used to having to wear them, but this is the first she's seen of them. I almost had him explain that he had to wear them for reading and how he's depending on them more and more, but I decided to keep it simple. He just tells her, "I've gotten old these past few years." She tells him in response, to show her acceptance, "We all have."
I am more than happy to include you in this! You're a dear friend, a wonderful person, and I very much value your opinions. Rain Dogs has become something very important to me, and I want to share it with all of my friends. ♥
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"Now we match," she tells him, attempting a bit of humor as he breaks down.
Yes! Everything you said makes perfect sense, and it's exactly what I intend to do with Rain Dogs.
Aw, goodness, I hope box.net works for you! If not, I'm willing to upload it to another site for you.
Excellent! One thing I've learned is to go with my creative instinct and with what feels right, and dark hair is Aviva.
Thank you! I was worried about writing effective dialogue, but as with the rest of the screenplay, I found that it all flowed naturally once I just learned to relax and go with it. There's quite a bit of double-meaning in the things they say to one another, which worked so perfectly without my having to overtly elaborate. For example, when they reunite and Aviva is showing him the papers she forged for his Belgian identity, he takes out a pair of eyeglasses from his shirt pocket so he can read them. In his time away, he got used to having to wear them, but this is the first she's seen of them. I almost had him explain that he had to wear them for reading and how he's depending on them more and more, but I decided to keep it simple. He just tells her,
"I've gotten old these past few years."
She tells him in response, to show her acceptance,
"We all have."
I certainly can! I usually go on danielbruhl.com, but the site is currently down. However, I have lots of photos I have saved from various sources, which I can upload to my photobucket account and link you to. When I made this graphic, I used screencaps of Daniel from In Tranzit, though really, any current images of Daniel work for Manfried. I first wasn't certain of what to show of his time as a soldier, until deciding to show only what Aviva narrates. Since she is telling the story as it has happened, I felt it was best to show the effects of the war on Manfried in the aftermath, rather than having combat scenes, as the man she knows and loves is the man she had first met when he was stationed in Paris.
And of course, for Mélanie: http://www.melanie-laurent.net/gallery/index.php?cat=15
I am more than happy to include you in this! You're a dear friend, a wonderful person, and I very much value your opinions. Rain Dogs has become something very important to me, and I want to share it with all of my friends. ♥