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Rain Dogs: The opening

This is something I've been wanting to share, and always intended to: the opening series of scenes to my screenplay, Rain Dogs.

It's been said that the first 5-10 pages of a screenplay must be dynamic enough to capture the reader's attention. Hopefully, I've been able to do just that.

word count: 985 (three pages)

A BLACK SCREEN

The panicked footfalls and gasping struggles for breath of a running woman echo heavily throughout a cobblestone street.

FADE IN:

EXT. PARIS, FRANCE - NIGHT - PRESENT DAY

The still, beautifully fraught, wide-eyed face of a young woman, AVIVA CRÉMIEUX. Hers is a haunting countenance; her pale skin marred with streaks of red as she bleeds profusely from a nasty gash above her forehead. Despite this circumstance, Aviva retains her composure with her eyes fixedly directed in front of her. In this moment, she is the center of the universe.

EXT. PARIS, FRANCE - NIGHT - FLASHFORWARD

Clad only in a white slip of a dressing gown, Aviva runs barefoot through the cobblestone streets of the city. Even as the throbbing pain of her wound and the strain of her emotions bears down on her, Aviva cannot stop.

INT. REGISTRY OFFICE - DAY - FLASHBACK

Aviva stands in line in a pitiful excuse for an office, set up in a building that has been requisitioned by the occupying German forces. Drab and sparse with far too bright lighting, French citizens from all walks of life queue up in line to register their status. With people lined up behind her, ahead of her, and bustling about around her, no one present, save for the NAZI SS OFFICERS handling the situation, is comfortable. Milling about like pests are two SS OFFICERS filming the proceedings with a camera. Their presence is at once irritating and intimidating as they pick and choose people in the line-up at seemingly random to focus in on.

Aviva is one of them. The camera is in her face, but she refuses to acknowledge it. The SS officers SPEAK to each other as they observe her, but she cannot understand them, a fact that they are well aware of. As the SS officers find their amusement in Aviva, she cannot help but give their camera a glimpse from the corner of her eye. It distracts her, enough for Aviva to not notice her turn in line.

Before her, seated behind a desk, is a higher ranking GERMAN OFFICER. He is detached, efficient, and all business. He speaks Aviva's language, though accented with his native tongue. This, coupled with his demeanor, makes him an imposing figure.

GERMAN OFFICER
(in French, subtitled in English)
Your name?

EXT. PARIS, FRANCE - NIGHT - FLASHFORWARD

Aviva stays the course through the city streets. Though she has no known destination in sight, she does not slow her pace.

INT. MUSIC HALL - NIGHT - FLASHBACK

Appropriately and magnificently dressed for the occasion, Aviva is seated in an orchestra pit. As part of an ensemble, she plays her violin with zeal, providing the soundtrack to a theatrical spectacle. But the stage is of no matter to Aviva. Her full focus is on the instrument held within her hands. She is lost to the music and her passion.

EXT. PARIS, FRANCE - NIGHT - PRESENT DAY

Aviva's stare is impenetrable.

AVIVA (V.O.)
(in French, subtitled in English)
My name is Aviva Crémieux.

EXT. PARIS, FRANCE - NIGHT - FLASHFORWARD

Aviva forces herself onward. Her breathing is now strenuous.

INT. BEDROOM - NIGHT - FLASHBACK

Lost in ardor, Aviva MAKES LOVE with MANFRIED HERZ. Here, with each other, the two have their haven. She clings tightly to him in a fervent embrace as his hands, never still, roam over her. Together, their movements grow more demanding and more erratic. As their fervency increases, Aviva's CRIES grow high and keening.

EXT. PARIS, FRANCE - NIGHT - PRESENT DAY

In spite of everything that has led up to this moment, Aviva's mask of stoicism is sustained. Steadily, she looks on.

AVIVA (V.O.)
(in French, subtitled in English)
If there is anything at all that I am to take from this --

EXT. PARIS, FRANCE - NIGHT - FLASHFORWARD

Aviva is losing her breath as she fights back the SOB caught in her throat, but to no avail.

INT. REGISTRY OFFICE - DAY - FLASHBACK

The SS officers filming Aviva have the camera far too close for comfort in her face. But she is steadfast, staring down the German officer seated before her. His next question for Aviva is one he has already determined the answer to.

GERMAN OFFICER
(in French, subtitled in English)
Your religion?

EXT. PARIS, FRANCE - NIGHT - PRESENT DAY

With her white slip and bloody wound, Aviva is a spectral sight as she stands barefoot in the street before Manfried. Here, now, he wears the muted olive green uniform of a German Wehrmacht soldier. His distinctive, militaristic haircut is slightly mussed. Despite their given situation, he remains strikingly handsome.

Nearby them lay the DEAD bodies of two FRENCH POLICEMEN. Aviva and Manfried are flanked on either side by residential buildings, but the neighborhood seems eerily desolate. There are no other signs of life; it is as if the two of them are the last man and woman on earth. Their eyes are fixed on one another; they neither move nor speak.

INT. REGISTRY OFFICE - DAY - FLASHBACK

Aviva gives in to the camera the SS officers have shoved in her face and she looks into it, unwaveringly. She then turns her attention back to the German officer and answers him in the same manner with which he has spoken to her.

AVIVA
(in French, subtitled in English)
I am Jewish.

EXT. PARIS, FRANCE - NIGHT - PRESENT DAY

Aviva and Manfried are hanging by a thread. His heart splits in two at not only the condition she is in, but for what their current state of affairs means for them both. He wants to give of something, anything to her. But try as he might, Manfried cannot find the proper words or gesture.

AVIVA (V.O.)
(in French, subtitled in English)
-- One cannot fight their fate.

The thread breaks.

FADE OUT

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AHHHHHH OMG OMG OMG OMG. I still need to comment on your "welcome back" post, but dear sweet Jesus on a whole wheat goddamn cracker this is AMAZING. I can't even. GAH. Love love love. Beyond words. ♥

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(You'll find my anxiety over typing up what I've written so far in that post)

Can I just say how incredibly encouraging this is? I've realized, as I continue to work on this screenplay that it's becoming something concrete and permanent, which does terrify me a bit. Part of it is how personal the story has become and how much it means to me; the other part is omg I am writing a screenplay what am I doing this is insane.

When I'm ready to, I'll post more.

I cannot WAIT to read some more (at your own sweet pace, obvs)!! I would totally see this film; you had me hook, line, and sinker.

P.S. I ♥ your icon.

It's my goal to get it all typed up by the end of this year, so I can focus on proper revisions and seeing what I can do with it next year. So hopefully, it won't be too long until I'm ready to share more of it.

I won't mind if you're the only who does. Someone other than me has to like it.

Thank you! I made it from fanart

sendhimaway drew it for me. Her mind is as delightfully warped as mine is.

ok let me talk about this gif she's like really uncomfortable but she doesn't wanna make a scene infront of hellstrom, goebbels, mistress and especially not infront of zoller and she's doing her best to smile thru it all and she's panicking, trying to calm herself so she looks at zoller and she stretches a smile and looks down which is a sign of embarrassment and he's like, you're ok, you're doing ok and when he moves his hand to wave at her it was actually a halted motion to go and touch her, to comfort her but he can't display such emotion infront of goebbels.

the end

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YES. Omg, yes.

I recall you tweeting before about how he restrained himself from reaching out to her, though he really wanted to. It especially fits with the extended scene on the dvd when he reaches his arm out behind her shoulder/chair, because it's at that moment that he can no longer hold back.

and he's like, you're ok, you're doing ok
Something about this just really hits me emotionally.

Hey man, I'm only expressing my feelings about the matter. ;)

Yep! I do remember that. I love that moment in their relationship, the wanting to touch, those gazing. UGHHHHHHHHHHH. I h8 u QT. So rude.

Omg no crying or I'll beat you up!

And your feelings are beautiful ♥

I love that moment so much. And then it's perfectly capped off with Shoshi staring up at him, silently pleading with him to get her out of there and away from Landa. It was so genuine, showing that not only does she know she can trust him, but if she absolutely had to, she would've blurted it all out at Freddy. And he would've risked it life and limb for her.
Ugh, you know QT watches it with a big bowl of popcorn in his lap and gets all emotional.

I can't help it! I feel things for them. So many things. Also, I'm PMSing pretty bad, so you can punch me, but I'll keep on crying.

DON'T MAKE ME CUDDLE YOU LIKE A BABY.

YOU MIGHT HAVE TO, NOT SRY2SAY.

It's incredibly cruel of you to have only put up three pages! I love it.

Aw, goodness ♥ At the moment, there are select parts I'd like to share here, so there will certainly be more to come!

Thank you so very much!

Amazing! For some reason, I really like the part where she was playing the violin; I can picture it perfectly. The flow of the scenes is great.

Thank you!

Ah, well, her violin is an important part of her life, so I'm glad that was able to come through. Writing her relationships with Manfried and her violin are the aspects of the story that require the most care (and the most anxiety-inducing, because fretting is like a second job). Excellent! I wanted to be able to establish the most important parts of Aviva and her life during the war, and I felt that was the best, most effective way to do it (as after that comes the opening credits sequence and then the story begins in 1945).

I am just really happy that I can manage to get all of this out of my head and onto the computer screen.

You successfully highlighted those two important aspects and her scenes with Manfried are beautiful. I like how you kind of gave them away in glimpses -- imagining it all with a violin playing in the background is just glorious.

I'm just going to be ineloquent here for a moment, but omg thank you.

A big reason for my tredipation when it came to finally typing out what I've scribbled out so far (and to see it through to the end) is that I'm terrified of not being able to properly tell this story. I hadn't written in years until recently (late 2009, to be precise, which is when I started plotting this), so to get into writing again with such a major ambition is intimidating, to say the least. Writing Rain Dogs has been very creatively fulfilling for me, and it completely presses all the right buttons for me emotionally.

This is a story I feel I need to tell, and to see that indeed, I may just be able to pull it off is extremely heartening. I should've taken up writing much earlier.

I
AM
SCREAMING
!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

THIS IS AS PERFECT AS I IMAGINED IT WOULD BE OMGGG
THAT PART WHERE YOU CUT TO AVIVA AND MANFRIED MAKING LOVE I ACTUALLY SEAL CLAPPED

AND UGHHHH WHEN THE OFFICERS ARE FILMING HER I. CANNOT. THAT GOT TO ME OK
I REALLY IMAGINED MELANIE WITH HER POKER FACE
I ADOREEEEEE THE WAY YOU SPLIT THE SCENES WITH THE FLASHBACKS AND THE FLASHFORWARDS
THIS IS PERFECT LET ME DIEEE
YOU ARE PERFECT
THIS WILL BE PERFECT
AAAHHHHHHHH

Edited 2011-08-05 02:28 (UTC)

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OMG THE FACT THAT YOU SEAL-CLAPPED VALIDATES EVERYTHING I'M DOING WITH THIS.

I tell you, Jennifer, Rain Dogs is most personal and ambitious creative project I've ever tackled and to be able to share it (even in bits and pieces) and to receive such responses as I have makes it even better. Like, I know, I just know that I'll be able to tell the story I want to tell and that others will feel something from it.

Bits of the opening will be elaborated upon later in the script, but I felt the opening really helped to quickly establish things so that I could get right into the story as it takes place in 1945.

And omg the filming of Aviva. Okay, I stole that bit from The Night Porter (don't watch it, it's awful), and the woman in that was so terribly meek she kept shying away, which made the harassment worse, but I thought it'd a perfect way to show Aviva's fortitude right off the bat. She has lots of moments of vulnerability, but she's certainly not going to take anyone's shit if she can help it.

THIS IS ACTUALLY HAPPENING. I'M ACTUALLY WRITING THIS. THIS IS KIND OF INSANE AND IF DANIEL AND MELANIE SAY NO TO IT I SWEAR I WILL UGLY CRY AT THEM.

(I also appreciate you bringing a nice bit of James/Lily into this post)

ALSKDJFHG :''')
this is really like your baby!!! aahh I feel touched and honored you're sharing this, this, that is so important to you with us!

I LOVED the opening, it really sets the mood for the rest of the script. I like that we see the most important aspects of Aviva, that she's in love with Manfried, she's jewish, and most important, that she's a fighter.

GOD I'M SO EXCITED FOR THIS ANS FOR YOU!!!! UGH THEY WILL. THEY'D BE FOOLS NOT TO ACCEPT IT.

our otps belong togetherrrrr

You know, that was the most frightening part of typing up everything I've been scribbling out in notebooks all this time: it becomes something concrete and permanent.

The thought of that terrifies me in a way. I mean, for years (this was back when I aspired to be involved in special make-up effects), I've had lots of ideas for films, but nothing quite on this level. Rain Dogs really is my baby! To be able to share it with you and others is, simply put, amazing.

Yes, yes, yes! dfsxasx I love that I'm able to get that all across! This is basically my baby and my tribute to my major film favorites and influences. I CAN DO THIS, OMG.

THEY WOULD BE. I THINK I CAN GET THEM TO DO IT, THOUGH. THEY CAN'T RESIST ME.

Our OTPs are flawless.

How come I have not seen this already? Terrible, terrible of me! Phuff!

IT'S PERFECT! Perfect, Miriam!

You have such a gorgeous way with words and language, I already know that, but still!
I tried to write down a few of my first impressions for you as I read along, I hope you don't mind! First it was a little confusing to follow the progress of the story because it jumps across time and back, but as soon as I got into it, catch the rhythm of it, it really became quite enjoyable, helps focusing the tension and makes it very dynamic.
I can see the scenes before my eyes, I image them with dark colors; dark blue, black and red with sharp lights and yellow in the reg. office.

she is the center of the universe You caught me with this line, I love it, it helped me greatly to enter the "headspace" of the character.

from all walks of life I just love this line, it describes so many things at once with so little words.

Aviva is one of them. The camera is in her face, but she refuses to acknowledge it. The SS officers SPEAK to each other as they observe her, but she cannot understand them, a fact that they are well aware of. As the SS officers find their amusement in Aviva, she cannot help but give their camera a glimpse from the corner of her eye. It distracts her, enough for Aviva to not notice her turn in line. my favorite passage, I can see it crystal clean in my head, how she looks through her lashes. And makes such a contrast with the scene where she stares into the camera bravely/not caring/rebelliously, it's fabulous!
And the ending scene...just WOW! I don't have words for it..
You got me completely, I want to see this!!!!!

How do you imagine Aviva and Manfried? Who would you cast for their roles? Mélanie would be perfect, but I think a younger Kate Winslet'd be great too.
If I find my perfect Aviva, I might just make a graphic for you with your permission, of course!

Thank you for sharing! Waiting with bated breath for the next installment!
♥♥

Oh, goodness thank you! I sincerely mean that. Since this is a spec script, I have to be able to dictate what's happening through creative writing without the use of camera and editing directions (that's all added in once a screenplay goes into production). Writing for the screen is much different than a story, as you can't bog everything down in detail, and plenty of room must be left for the actor to interpret the character's actions. That was intimidating at first, but I've gotten into the flow of it, and I find the less I stress over it, the more it comes together.

Michael Mann and Kathryn Bigelow are two directors I adore who have such a gorgeous, distinct visual style, and I suppose that's how I visualize it. The color scheme you picture really fits that, too!

The opening is a quick succession of scenes to quickly establish some things about Aviva and Manfried, as after this, it opens in July 1945 with the two of them after the war. There's quite a bit going on (I'm actually surprised by that, it all just happened naturally), but the main focus is on Aviva and Manfried and their relationship, which to them, isn't this impossible thing. Their story in the present, as well as how it came to be, is revealed and explained along the way. At its core, Rain Dogs is a love story.

I have all of my influences in this, from Shosanna/Fredrick (this was because of them, after all) to Blade Runner to even a bit of dialogue inspired by Inception. There are elements from other films, some of which, I suspect even Quentin used (such as the sweet German soldier in A Time to Love and A Time to Die); some films didn't work and others did, so I paid close attention to such details.

Young Kate Winslet would be an excellent choice for how emotional the story is, but I'm doing what Quentin did and sticking to French and German actors. I'm probably a bit predictable here, but indeed, Mélanie and Daniel are who I have in mind as Aviva and Manfried. Their acting talents and aesthetics aside, they have the right chemistry to bring the relationship to life.

I put together a playlist for them earlier in the year, using imagery from La Chambre des morts and In Tranzit, but I think of Aviva more and more with lighter hair (especially since in 1945, she has it dyed red), but such images helped to flesh the characters out more when I first started plotting Rain Dogs: http://suspiriorum.livejournal.com/107676.html

I'm rambling on, but no matter what both have gone through in their time apart, they both know that neither has changed, even if their appearances have. They still feel the same for each other as they always did. Aviva was more timid and virginal before meeting Manfried, and he was a little more vulnerable in spite of his uniform. They're both a little more hardened and a little more gentle after the war, but they're still the same.

I'm rambling now, but I love this story and these characters, and I'm amazed with how far I've come with it.

And yes! I'd love it if you made a graphic for them!

And I'm more than excited to be able to share this with you. One thing I've noticed is how receptive people have been to it, in spite of the subject matter. That's what I worry about, since it's all kind of delicate.

So I'm just jumping right in with rambling reply because I can never seem to be simple with my words.

I realized I want Aviva to have dark hair. I was toying around with details in my screenplay, and I think it works much better to keep the dark hair. I do admit, women such as Rachael from Blade Runner and Mal from Inception with their dark hair has been an influence. I would put Aviva alongside them with the innocence and strength they're capable of, as well as being so intensely loved by the men in their lives.

Again, as far as aesthetics are concerned, Mélanie is very striking with dark hair, for the beautiful contrast it provides with her pale skin and green eyes. It's an image that stick with me when I first planned and wrote the opening, of seeing Mélanie as Aviva, with dark hair, pale skin, wide green eyes, and the streaks of blood upon her face from her wound.

There's another visual that sticks with me very strongly, too. Manfried has kept a photograph of Aviva that she had given to him when they first began their relationship in 1941. It's black and white, taken by her mother before Aviva was to leave Nevers for Paris. I see Aviva in a modest dress and a long, black overcoat. She's outside, with a field and forest stretching back behind her. She looks into the camera with those same wide eyes, but they're large and clear with anticipation of the life she's going to set out to make for herself.

The photograph, along with others of her family, was hung on the wall in a frame. She removed it and gave it to Manfried to keep. In his time away on the Eastern Front during their separation after the round-up of 1942 to him making his way to Holland and back to France, he always kept it, even when he lost everything else. As he tells her when they reunite,
"I couldn't let them take you from me."

I think of these details and these moments, of a dark haired Mélanie as Aviva; this young woman who is guarded and careful, yet very open with the man she loves, and who, no matter what she did to survive the war and to be reunited with him, is still such an innocent.

Firstly, you did not ramble for a minute! I quite enjoy the "peeking" into your head. :D ~~more, please!~~

I'm the same way once!! Once I start something, it's like it's flowing right through me, so I just have to get over myself as an obstacle and not to give into my fears that it won't be good enough, blah-blah-blah.. So just continue this way!

Michael Mann and Kathryn Bigelow would be great choices, The Last of the Mohicans and Strange Days are among my favorites!!

If I understand it correctly, these pages are a kind of an "introduction", flashbacks to the time during the war and the film would be mainly about how they find the way back to their love, to each other. I love this idea, a true love story!! Would be perfect in a theater as well.

As for the delicate subject, yes it is a delicate, sensitive and complex subject, not easy to talk, write about. But your story, I think is mostly about love, forgiveness and harmony, how they loved each other through time and war despite religion, nationality.. It could be placed anywhere in time or space, during any conflict of human history. Truly inspiring! Also You give Shosanna and Fredrick the ending, they could've never had! I hope this is all make sense for you and not just in my head?!

I'm taking the mix and I'll get back to you once I listened to it. I tried to download it, but box.net is being a b*tch and doesn't even load for me! But fear none I'm going to give it another try later! Yay!

I always imagined Aviva with black hair and red, full lips, so I can just encourage you to go with it!:D

"I couldn't let them take you from me." What a gorgeous moment! So touching!

Also could you recommend me some galleries for Daniel and Mélanie? The ones I know are..very spare. Thanks!

Thank you for including me in this, I feel honored and I greatly appreciate it!
♥♥

There's so much I could go on about, really. The more I work with it, whether I'm writing it out or just playing over scenes and details in my head (which is frequently), the more it just builds and flows; it's a story that almost wants to tell itself once I'm in the right mindset.

Mine, as well! Near Dark and Manhunter are my ultimate favorites of their work, just for the atmosphere and emotion (Manhunter, especially, is an inspiration. The soundtrack is my all-time favorite).

Yes! It's to quickly and easily establish key elements for Aviva and Manfried so the story can pick up after the war. And absolutely, their love story is the focus; of how they still must fight to be together and how they came to be together in the first place.

Indeed, at its core, it is a love story. It first originally took place during the war, with a variety of other characters. As much I loved them, I wanted the focus to be on Aviva and Manfried, so I pushed it forward and dropped nearly everyone else (I'll save them for something else). I was initially apprehensive to share this others in the beginning, other than a couple close friends because of the delicate nature of the story and setting. Aside from Shoasanna and Fredrick and Zwartboek, there aren't any films that have really approached this kind of story. I understand why, but I think of how Verhoeven based Zwartboek off of a true story, and it made me wonder just how many people were like those characters and like Shosanna and Fredrick in real life.

At the heart of it, what leads Aviva to falling in love with Manfried is how human he is. There's a quite a bit involved here, but I'm keeping some of it under wraps, so as not to spoil you. Manfried is, much like Aviva, devoted to his family, which is, at the point they meet, only his mother - and she is the reason he's even fighting in the war. He served in the Afrika Korps, under Erwin Rommel. During the Siege of Tobruk, Manfried was wounded by shrapnel in his left side, leading to massive blood loss, as well as the loss of his left kidney. He's in Paris because of a commendation from Rommel, and after spending months in recovery, being given attention by a very beautiful French girl is very appealing to him. That's the thing of it, really; Manfried is in a very vulnerable condition, both mentally and to an extent, physically. Yet, he's very willing and ready to be open with Aviva, which initially gets to her. His intentions are very honest and kind, and her identity doesn't deter him. He is, I think, the first man she's ever been with, and she's the first, outside medical personnel, to see his scar.

There's something I very much like about that visual; the way I have it planned out is that he allows her (while she is still fully clothed) to undress him, allowing her in many ways to see the person he truly is. And very tentatively, she reaches to his scar, running her fingers over it. Later on, after they reunite, Aviva is wounded in a way that leaves a similar scar in an identical place on her left side, which Manfried mends himself.
"Now we match," she tells him, attempting a bit of humor as he breaks down.

Yes! Everything you said makes perfect sense, and it's exactly what I intend to do with Rain Dogs.

Aw, goodness, I hope box.net works for you! If not, I'm willing to upload it to another site for you.

Excellent! One thing I've learned is to go with my creative instinct and with what feels right, and dark hair is Aviva.

Thank you! I was worried about writing effective dialogue, but as with the rest of the screenplay, I found that it all flowed naturally once I just learned to relax and go with it. There's quite a bit of double-meaning in the things they say to one another, which worked so perfectly without my having to overtly elaborate. For example, when they reunite and Aviva is showing him the papers she forged for his Belgian identity, he takes out a pair of eyeglasses from his shirt pocket so he can read them. In his time away, he got used to having to wear them, but this is the first she's seen of them. I almost had him explain that he had to wear them for reading and how he's depending on them more and more, but I decided to keep it simple. He just tells her,
"I've gotten old these past few years."
She tells him in response, to show her acceptance,
"We all have."

I certainly can! I usually go on danielbruhl.com, but the site is currently down. However, I have lots of photos I have saved from various sources, which I can upload to my photobucket account and link you to. When I made this graphic, I used screencaps of Daniel from In Tranzit, though really, any current images of Daniel work for Manfried. I first wasn't certain of what to show of his time as a soldier, until deciding to show only what Aviva narrates. Since she is telling the story as it has happened, I felt it was best to show the effects of the war on Manfried in the aftermath, rather than having combat scenes, as the man she knows and loves is the man she had first met when he was stationed in Paris.
And of course, for Mélanie: http://www.melanie-laurent.net/gallery/index.php?cat=15

I am more than happy to include you in this! You're a dear friend, a wonderful person, and I very much value your opinions. Rain Dogs has become something very important to me, and I want to share it with all of my friends. ♥

So here's a collection of photos of Daniel I think are fitting: http://s41.photobucket.com/albums/e274/NurseJoker/Daniel%20Bruhl/

When they reunite, his hair has grown in from the militaristic style it was previously. Manfried is a bit scruffy at times, such as when the story picks up in 1945 after he's been on the run for a while, and later on, when they're both stuck in a tough situation.

Both Aviva and Manfried smoke, too.

If there's anything else you'd like to know about them, I'd be more than happy to go on.

♥

A little more detail:

There are moments in both comfort and intimacy in which Manfried speaks to Aviva in German, which she understands; things he only says to her.

For these moments, I'm only writing in the script that this dialogue is ad-libbed, as I prefer for it to be determined by the actors to know what would be said between them. It would not be translated into subtitles, as only they would know. It's something that I think would help keep up the much needed intimacy between the characters.

oh, wow okay, I love this so much! It's incredibly beautiful written and I'm so glad you've decided to share some of it! I can really imagine Mélanie in the role. So much love! ♥♥♥

Thank you so, so much!

I keep saying this to everyone, but I mean it: being able to create something that's original and personal of my own is amazing. I am just so, so excited and thrilled with how the story's developed that writing it is absolutely fulfilling.

I am smug enough to believe that Mélanie and Daniel would want to do it, too.

(Also I am glad to hear from you!)

♥

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